There once lived a man named Jayson Jones. He was a short man, with a bald head and a goatee. He was fairly build and was like any other black man living in the streets of Brooklyn, struggling to make money and to provide for his family. Jayson has two twin boys , Marcus and Tyrone, both 8-years old. Their mother left him when they were just two and from that day he's been working hard to provide for of them. Jayson worked at factory, boxing small car parts. He didn't get paid that much, but it was all he got. He needed more money in order for his boys to have better life, and get out of the projects of Brooklyn. Big T, a child hood friend of his came to him on Tuesday afternoon and told him about a job that he may be interested in. He was going to rob a drug dealer with anther man, and he told him that the drug dealer had at least $25,000 in cash. Jayson thought it over. He really needed the money, and if all went well he could start a new life with his boys. Jayson asked Big T what his job would be, and Big T told him that he was to come in with him at the drug dealers house and shoot anybody who got in his way. After a couple of minutes of thinking, Jayson accepted the offer and off they went to rob the drug dealer. When they arrived at the house of the drug dealer, Jayson, Big T, and the other guy went around the house holding pump shotguns. They silently went in from the back window of the house. There were four large black guys in the living room and behind them was the cash. Jayson and Big T opened fire at them, while the other guy started putting money in the bag. After they killed the four black guys, ten more came out of the basement holding swords and axes.They managed to kill two of them, but the third one decapitated Big T with a sword. The other guy who was putting the money in the bag tried to run away buy before he could one of the black guys cut him right in half with an ax. Jayson ran into the washroom before they could get to him. In the washroom were three teenager Chinese boys tied up in the bathtub. Jayson could either kill the rest of the men, save the boys and hand the drug money to the police or he could run away through the window and come back for the money some other day. Jayson untied the three boys and opened the washroom door. He shot at two of the black men that came at him first. They fell to the ground with there face blown off. He told the Chinese boys to get out of here, and they ran out from the front door and into freedom. As Jayson tried to kill the remaining men, someone came up to behind him and stabbed him in the back. Jayson fell to the ground bleeding. At least he saved the boys from these men he thought to himself as he gave in to his last breath.
Revised:
There once lived a short bald black man named Jayson Jones. Jayson lived in Brooklyn and he needed money to provide for his family. His job didn't pay him that much. So one day he decided to rob a drug dealer with a man name Big-T and his friend. When they went to rob the drug dealer at his house, there were a bunch of black guys guarding the money. They killed Big-T and his friend. Jayson hid in the washroom and found some kidnapped Asian boys. Jayson helped the Asian boys escape but he got killed trying to save the boys and also retrieving the money.
Revised Once More:
Jayson Jones, a black man living in Brooklyn needed money to provide for his family. His job didn't pay him well. One day he decided to rob a drug dealer with his friends. The money was guarded by a group of black guys. They killed Jayson's friend. Jayson hid in the washroom where he helped three kidnapped Asian boys run away. He got killed while trying to help them.
Reflection:
This story relates back to my first quote, "You gain strength, courage, and confidence by every experience in which you really stop to look fear in the face. You must do the thing which you think you cannot do." Jayson has to face his fear of the black men trying to kill him in order for him to save the Asian boys. He knows that he may die, but he bring up all his courage and uses it to fight his way through the remaining men before he gets killed. However, with his courage he is able to save the Asian boys.
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